Middle school rookie writers trying to make sense of chaos at the base of the Rocky Mountains
Thursday, November 10, 2016
His Eyes
Gleaming copper,
Smiling gold.
Still innocent,
Not yet cold.
Sparkling in
the hot sun.
All day,
Until day is done.
Looking up,
To the skies.
Everything's perfect,
in those eyes.
6 comments:
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I like this peom because it shows how pretty you eyes can be.
Oh my gosh. I really love this. It's so deep and complex, yet so easy and simple. This reminds me of the poem "Natures first green is gold". What made you write this poem and what were the feelings during this poem?
This poem really shows that you put a lot of work and effort into writing this! I think that you selected really great words for this poem, and they all make sense together. This poem makes you wonder what the story behind it is, and if anything will happen next.
Yeah, it reminded me of "Nothing Gold Can Stay" as well. Your writing paints a picture of a boy's eyes that are so young and innocent and perfect. I think Penny had some good questions... do you have the answers? I'd like to know as well!
6 comments:
I like this peom because it shows how pretty you eyes can be.
Oh my gosh. I really love this. It's so deep and complex, yet so easy and simple. This reminds me of the poem "Natures first green is gold". What made you write this poem and what were the feelings during this poem?
I love the descriptions in this poem. I wonder if it is written with imagination or perhaps a certain love in mind.
This poem really shows that you put a lot of work and effort into writing this! I think that you selected really great words for this poem, and they all make sense together. This poem makes you wonder what the story behind it is, and if anything will happen next.
Yeah, it reminded me of "Nothing Gold Can Stay" as well. Your writing paints a picture of a boy's eyes that are so young and innocent and perfect. I think Penny had some good questions... do you have the answers? I'd like to know as well!
Great poem! The eyes can show you a lot about the person. I like the why you wrote it. Where did you get this idea from?
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