Monday, May 15, 2017
Graveyard
Why? Why are there 100 plus stones in one place? Well, because it is a graveyard of course. I was at the graveyard on Friday night. The owls were loud and I was scared. All of a sudden I felt sleepy and fell down and hit my head hard on the road. The thick blood poured out. When I woke up, I saw the light. Light of my mom's car that was picking me up and taking me home safely.
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Graveyards are quite scary! I think the story would be even greater if you added more detail into it. :)
I really like the lines, "When I woke up, I saw the light. Light of my mom's car that was picking me up and taking me home safely." For a second I though hah this dude/dudette is going to die in a graveyard how unfortunate, but then he was just being picked up by his mum. Kinda lovely how you lead us to believe one thing but then it ends up not being that one thing.
Thanks for the compliment.
I agree. This story would be a lot more interesting if you added more detail. Great little story though
I love how at the end, it creates fear as he passes out with blood running out his skull, but then at the end he is taken care of put into safety. Good job!
I love the end but I fell like you could make it longer and more interesting
This is a very interesting story. Throughout the story there were cliffhangers, but then you kept going. So maybe on your next story keep it at a cliffhanger, but great story!
i like the story
That sounds horrible. But great story!
I like the end but you could make it longer
This was very sad to me, to think of all the people who once were here. Then, it got creepy and I really licked it. Very descriptive!
I like how introduced your mom coming! Great job!
It's short, but its great writing, good job.
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