Day 1
When did I get here? I woke up in this desert all alone. I have money, a gun, and a lighter. All I can see is sand and cacti. I have learned to drink the cactus water and it tastes like normal plain water. I still have no food. My only choice is to hike until I find civilization.
Day 2
I woke up to a rattlesnake just ten feet away from me. I killed and cooked it. Rattlesnake has great flavor. I am low on ammo for my gun. I just found a river, hopefully leading to civilization.
13 comments:
I like the format of the writting, kinda reminds me of a journal. Nice work.
i liked all the details you had in the story
I love the details. But I hate raddle snakes, I would have killed it too and are it. Good protein🙂 Keep writing!
The way you arranged the story was amazing. The details kept me in my feet, and I wanted to keep reading forever.
I like the part about the rattle snake. I was in a similar experience to that. Great job.
short and sweet. I love it!
I hope he/she lives and I also really hope you add on to this story goes he/she live where does he/ she end up!!??
The cliffhanger at the end! I like how you write in the first person and make smile notes just like that character would. Also, I like how you don't describe that character, and leave him as a bit of a mystery.
I like the imagery and I think you should keep this as a series I think it could lead to a great short story!
I like how you described what day you were in! Great job!
The format was great! It's so great the way you arranged the days!
This was cool I like the day to day Dynamic
I love the details and I hope you continue this story, I think it would turn out lovely.
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